Still Working on Getting It Right

I’m blowing the top off of our script right now to try to make it stronger than the original script.

I think every screenwriter has encountered the Pixar rules for story telling. Rule # 4 goes like this:

Once upon a time there was ___. Every day, ___. One day ___. Because of that, ___. Because of that, ___. Until finally ___.

This helps structure the screenplay. Here’s one way our story could go:

Once upon a time there was a passionate, territorial, and brilliant scientist named Oscar. Every day, he would work on his science project and spend time with his girlfriend. One day, his science project got stolen (he suspected) by a competitor. Because of that, he cozied-up with the competition to see what they knew and didn’t know. Because of that, he found out his girlfriend was sleeping with the competition. Until finally, he killed the project, his girlfriend and himself.

This would be the outside, top level, bird’s eye view of the story. The next step would be to layer in all the mystery and deceit.

I’ve been using a book called the Coffee Break Screenwriter by Pilar Alessandra to help me solidify the plot points.

This is the first time that I’ve worked on adapting a story. At first, I stuck very close to the original version of Othello, but there are many pieces of that story that don’t fit neatly into screen play structure.

With this next re-write Jeff and I have decided to work more freely using the story as guideposts, but not lock-step. I think this will help blow more life into the character named Oscar.

Making Oscar an Actor

We are improving the script based upon feedback we’ve received from a few different sources. The main thing is that “Othello,” who we are now calling “Oscar” has not been an actor, meaning that he hasn’t been reacting instead of acting.

This means a pretty significant overhaul to the script, which will be worth it to improve things.

Some major plot points that we had outlined based on Shakespeare’s play will need to be revised to accommodate for a stronger character.

I’m working on that now and will get that to Jeff this week.

Thoughts on Deadlines

Christina and I had a great Skype call yesterday.  We chatted about the table read we did last week.  We agreed that the next call we do, we’ll record and post here, that way others can benefit from the process.  We feel it would be useful to some people to see how we hash out an idea.

Also, our deadline of being done with the movie by April 8, 2015 is not looking very realistic at this point.  The script is shaping up to be really great.  But of course, it is not perfect yet.  I want to be the best I know we can make it but at the same time, I don’t want to tweak it forever.  There comes a point where we have to move forward with it.  Though, I know there are some tweaks that must be made now in order to tell the story better.

A few thoughts are going through my head right now.  First, deadlines are useful and help us get stuff done.  Otherwise, things just get pushed off and pushed off.  I still think we need to push for a deadline.  Maybe we still push for the April 8, 2015 deadline.  And let’s see how close we come to it.

In terms of shooting, originally I thought we could rehearse like a play and shoot it in a weekend.  Now, I am thinking we do it more like every rehearsal is a dress rehearsal on location since the location will be in our studio.  We have all the equipment there already.  Plus, it will give both the cast and the crew the ability to test things out and get a feel for the actual shoot.  Though magic will pro

It will be shot on digital so the media is not cost prohibitive.  And it will give us the freedom to try different things.  This