Should this have gone in a reply? Oh well…
So if Michael is at the lab before Ian and Oscar, what is he doing? He was notified by the security system. Or he went there to work on the leaf. What time is it in the story? If Oscar was pitching Brian, then it could be late at like 2am because it’s when the bar is closing. So in the bar, we could see Desiree putting up chairs in the background.
Michael beats them there because he was going to work on the leaf. Is there some sort of implication with Desiree? What could be the implication with Desdemona and Michael? Michael said that Desiree texted him since they were closing up and Oscar was at the bar talking to her dad. She thought we might want to all hang out since we have been working so hard lately.
Then to show Oscar and Desdemona’s relationship, we can illustrate how they are at first with Michael explaining how he got the text from Desdemona. Desiree did not text Oscar because she did not want to disturb him during the meeting plus, he was right there. This could be the little opening that Ian uses to plant the seed of doubt. Why didn’t she tell you she wanted to hang out with you guys? Why was she inviting Michael to hang out so late.
At first, Oscar and Desiree’s relationship is good. It is trusting and healthy but it deteriorates when Ian makes the suggestions and plants the seeds of doubt. Of course, Ian suggests this to Oscar in secret or on the side.
Oscar can find out about Cyprus through some sort of automatic patent search he has set up. He reads the patents everyday. So at this point he finds out there has been a persistent leak or theft of information? Everyone is a suspect. Ian, Emilia, Michael, Rod, and their security system. He has to check on all of them and clear them.
Maybe the theft of the technology is too early? Maybe it was ok for the Sundance application but not for the story.